I love that poem! You explained how people feel when traveling some where on vacation perfectly, it was just hard to read the last few lines because of the text color. Nice job.
I know, sometime computers are so stubborn! That poem was short and sweet but yet had a creative choice of words. I liked it alot becasue I felt as if I was on the plane, and boy, do I want to really go to paradise!
There is anticipation in the voice of the poem, like when we really can't wait to go somewhere. You capture that feeling well. Perhaps experiment with the form a bit. Since the poem is light-hearted, maybe use a more playful, creative way to form the lines of the poem.
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I love that poem! You explained how people feel when traveling some where on vacation perfectly, it was just hard to read the last few lines because of the text color. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteCool poem but it got a little hard to read the last few lines like Natalie said. Was this about your trip to Florida?
ReplyDeleteI actually wrote it before I went to Florida but it was about that. Sorry about the text color I would have changed it but it wouldn't let me.
ReplyDeleteI know, sometime computers are so stubborn! That poem was short and sweet but yet had a creative choice of words. I liked it alot becasue I felt as if I was on the plane, and boy, do I want to really go to paradise!
ReplyDeleteThis was really good! and its cool how you wrote about it before you even went there, it shows your voice is strong
ReplyDeleteThere is anticipation in the voice of the poem, like when we really can't wait to go somewhere. You capture that feeling well. Perhaps experiment with the form a bit. Since the poem is light-hearted, maybe use a more playful, creative way to form the lines of the poem.
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