Author's Note: This is a poem inspired by "The Dandelion" from the Milwaukee Art Museum. When I first saw this sculpture, I immediately felt drawn to it. This piece also got me thinking about how young children are always picking up dandelions and making a wish on them. I experimented with a pattern in the stanzas as well.
It blows through the air
From a wind
A breath
Silently wishing
For something more
They hold a stem
From a field
A hope
Standing alone
Wanting something more
A journey taken
From a seed
A blow
Transforms itself
Into something more
This is really pretty, Sammy! It has kind of a light feeling to it. I think you should make it longer, because just when I was getting into the feel of it, it was over! I'd really like to read more.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Alaina that you should expand it. The format was very different and added a cool aspect to this piece. I would try things like this more often if I were you.
ReplyDeleteI liked this piece for it's simplicity and the idea of it based off such a fond childhood memory. The author's note did help to understand your view point on what you wrote. I also like the repetition in the piece.
ReplyDeleteAs Derek and Alaina said, it was good, but I almost wanted more. Like a final stanza to sum it up. I really enjoyed the repetition of the poem and enjoyed the lines decreasing to a single object and then increasing again, like a flight pattern of a dandelion. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThat was so pretty. I agree with Alaina, it has a light feeling to it that makes you feel like a little kid again. I really hope you add more to this!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem and I totally agree with what everyone said above. I think that you should add more too it because you could definitely turn something that is good into great! Nice job.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone here. You definitely should expand it. I loved how you interpreted the art too. The formatting was really cool and you just did a really good job with this piece
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